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11/12 2019

thesis statement
one sentence that explains the whole paper
3 parts
topic
claim
solution

On this day we talked about the thesis statement of our brochure which is the last sentence of our introduction. our problem was that there were still personal pronouns and we weren't able to have a clear topic as well as three good reasons to support the claim. The last sentence had to be separated into 3 parts which are the Topic, Claim, and Solution. out topic was about the changes that were in need for efficiency and solving the issues to create a more easy and safe environment was our claim. The solution to this is that we had to understand the problems and other consequences that it may lead to. Mr.Paterson also mentioned how the sentences should be a good length and use shorter descriptions rather than using many words to describe one certain thing.



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